Now he thought that the fault was his.
Too late because she would never open her eyes anymore. He would never see those tears again deliberately flowing from those pleading eyes. Her heart would never beat anymore. He would never hear its scared pounding as he succumbed to the manic soul laughing shrilly inside him. They were now a million miles away from each other.
She just went over to the other side. Too much for being together no matter what it may cost.
'Was it worth it?'
His voice was very distressed.
'Oh dear...Oh dear.. I'm sorry.'
He cried hard.
'I told you... I told you... I told you I'd just stay away...'
He felt his knees weaken from the despair and knelt down. Now on all fours, looking madly lost in his wide eyes, crying loudly as if it might wake his dead wife beside him, he banged his head on the floor. Until he died.
This was really well done! I'm really interested in what's going on in the story and you hooked me to it quickly which is always nice. Great job on the emotion, too! I feel sorry for the couple and I don't even really know why she died. You also leave room for speculation without being too vague. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteWow! Thanks for the comment, I really needed it. :)
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